Whoever Claims It Hardest, Remembers It Most Obsessively Critique

              The title seems disconnected from the story.  The entire story seems like a prologue or introduction. It branches from an unnamed “we” to an “I”, which it maintains until the last paragraph.  The shift back is marked with a paragraph of realization, a universal application of the “value” of bathrooms. This could be added to with a description of the complete universality- perhaps describing the vastly different natures of bathrooms that still have this inherent value- run down as well as ritzy, high-end ones- as well as examining other instances of this- life changing events, for better or for worse, an addict’s first hit and things like that.  I am interested in the qualities that make this value- what is required. I want to hear more of the “hues of bygone misgivings and unforeseen insights” and how they are tainted. The second to last sentence dubs “us” the “lucky ones” as “dwellers of this world” (which itself begs the question as opposed to what world) but does not include any mention of the unlucky ones. There is an entire unexplored group here, which I though could add a lot to the piece in contrast to the opening. Overall, the whole thing is a complete thought but seems slightly rushed and lacks any catharsis or even much of a buildup.  This is a good start but it seems like there is more to explore in what you’re trying to say.