The title strikes me as strange, since the narrator seems to be the one garnering affection for the wasps. Who is the captor in this situation? I could see it as both ways, since the wasps are in the narrator’s care, yet s/he is a slave to the wasps’ architectural inclinations. The third sentence in the first full section seems like a non-sequitur since s/he hates that there are very few insects of this type, which emphasizes the lack of similar insects but then states that s/he hates that they exist, implying that few would be better than many. I think the second diary-type entry could benefit from some contrasting through juxtaposition. I like the methods of anthropomorphizing the wasps. When she discusses their affinity for a certain song, I almost want to hear more about the wasps likes and dislikes—is the narrator curious at all? Does s/he experiment? The last line of the 17 February raises what is potentially the wasps’ affects on the narrator, but these seem understated. It goes with the theme of the story for the narrator to blow them off, but I would like to see more of the negative physical effects. The opening on Valentine’s day and the “love letter” seem like things that could be explored more. Also, he details at the end bring a lot to the narrative. I am curious why the mother kept the nest- did she know of its importance to the narrator?
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