Wednesday, March 6, 2013

i should have taken an ambien Critique


I like the idea of a therapist’s suggestion leading to a stream of consciousness piece during  a fit of insomnia. I wonder about her exact medium- is she on a computer or a physical journal?  This could at a lot to the piece about he personality- is she more old-fashioned or contemporary? Garside’s personality is hard to distinguish because the image of “army” green pants and his daughter’s name being cloud contrast, one being more drill sergant-ish and the other being more hippie-ish. Neither add to the idea of a typical religion teacher. Could this be explored more? I really like the phrase of “spit and bullshit” and the juxtaposition of the physical and the metaphorical. I would like to see more of this. I wish I could see more of the narrator, as our first idea of her personality is “if people like me go to hell then heaven will definitely be really boring” and we aren’t given the name Caitlyn until halfway down the last page. Just the fact that she call her grandfather “gramps” hints at their relationship. I would like to see more- was he a “fuddy duddy”?  Where does she think he went after death? I think the ending about feeding people “drugs instead of fear” was very powerful and it seems like just the start of an angry rant. I was kind of disappointed afterwards when she just left to sew her pants after that.

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